Sorry for not responding to this thread sooner Rhys. Good overall, but some tips
1) Add some screenshots or some promotional images. They help a lot.
2) Its not immediately clear what format the game is for.
3) Something which I try to do in reviews is to acknowledge who's in the target audience, and who isn't. It helps with bias.
Finally, Rhys, don't try to change the way you write in any major way. Your reviews are energetic and characterful, so try to keep that
